English Studio Pare: According to those in the travel business, the nature of the average ‘holiday’ is changing. Rather than seeking a relaxing break in a far-away place, people now want excitement on their holidays and are keen to participate in unusual and challenging activities. Do you agree or not?

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According to those in the travel business, the nature of the average ‘holiday’ is changing. Rather than seeking a relaxing break in a far-away place, people now want excitement on their holidays and are keen to participate in unusual and challenging activities. Do you agree or not?

Despite the fact that traditional holiday getaways still dominate a critical segment of the travel industry, non-conventional touristic destination and activities are inching their way into the market. Demand-driven or the fruit of some ingenious marketing campaign, they, nevertheless, seem to enrich the choice of consumers.

On the supply side, as globalisation breaks down barriers among countries and online travelling companies mushroom, traditional travel agencies are compelled to invent original touristic packages to compete in a saturated market. The advent of low-cost carriers as well as technological breakthroughs in the airline industries have further enabled these agencies to offer new routes to customers.

These changes are pushing down the price of travelling, in turn, boosting demand. A surging number of people are frequently packing their suitcases, up to a point, where holidays morph into an annual routine nearing boredom instead o the excitement-packed adventures which they initially were. I recently read of a person, who after having been to every corner of the globe, opted to apply for a tourist visa for war-prone Afghanistan. Alternatively, while a rising proportion of school leavers are taking a gap year to engage in humanitarian activities abroad, an increasingly environmentally-conscious society is urging people to undertake trekking trips in the Amazon and expeditions in the Arctic regions to save the rarefying fauna and flora.

However, not everyone is seeking an adrenaline rush, preferring a stay in a hotel coupled with visits to tourist attractions to relax after a period of hard work. Similarly, skydiving and other dangerous sports are likely to capture the interest of newly-weds who would rather opt for a romantic honeymoon in a paradisiac spot.

To conclude, though new trends have undoubtedly touched the tourist industry, these are minor changes rather than revolutionary phenomenons. While certainly suiting the needs of a wider range of individuals, some travellers will remain loyal to their traditional travel plans.

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Sentence: On the supply side, as globalisation breaks down barriers among countries and online travelling companies mushroom, traditional travel agencies are compelled to invent original touristic packages to compete in a saturated market.
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Sentence: Alternatively, while a rising proportion of school leavers are taking a gap year to engage in humanitarian activities abroad, an increasingly environmentally-conscious society is urging people to undertake trekking trips in the Amazon and expeditions in the Arctic regions to save the rarefying fauna and flora.
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