The position of women has changed markedly in the last thirty years or so. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children.

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The position of women has changed markedly in the last thirty years or so. Many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile delinquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

There has been a dramatic change in the women’s social status in recent years. Many people believe that this improvement is to bring problems to the children as women now have to balance home life and career. Personally, I am of mixed opinion on this.

To begin with, it is undeniable that women’s less amount of time for kids is one of the main reasons causing problems among youngsters. Admittedly, a woman’s traditional role in a typical family is to do the household chores, to look after children, to prepare meals, while her partner tend to be the breadwinner, bearing the financial burden. Hence, a mother, without doubt, is much closer to children than a father. Anecdotal evidence shows that teenagers usually turn to their mothers for advice for many issues they may encounter, ranging from conflicts at school to teenage love interests. If a woman prioritizes her works, the children may feel neglected and dispirited which probably incites them to get into social evils.

On the other hand, apart from the lack of mother’s attention, external factors also need to carry a good part of the blame. Due to the ever-increasing developments in mass media, adolescents have been bombarded with increasing amounts of violence and nudity on the Internet as well as on the television these days. Apparently, teenagers are physically and mentally immature; therefore, the early exposure to inappropriate content poses a threat to the young’s development. Furthermore, peer pressure is another obvious reason. In order to fit in with the surrounding, young adults are likely to do anything their friends induce them without careful consideration. As a consequence, this pressure contributes greatly to the upsurge of numerous social problems young people are facing, such as juvenile crime, teenage pregnancy, drug abusing, abortion and cohabitation.

All things considered, I firmly hold the view that women should not solely be responsible for adverse trends arising recently among the youth. However, because women have huge influence on kids, they should put high priority on being dedicated mothers for the sake of their children.

Sentence: Admittedly, a

Sentence: Admittedly, a woman's traditional role in a typical family is to do the household chores, to look after children, to prepare meals, while her partner tend to be the breadwinner, bearing the financial burden.
Description: The fragment partner tend to is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace tend with verb, past tense

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