The society would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. Some people agree, some others disagree. Discuss both view.

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The society would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. Some people agree, some others disagree. Discuss both view.
It is a fact that advertisements are now widespread on mass media. Some people believe that these do not serve any beneficial purposes, and even spoil the society, there should be an advertising restriction to hinder their negative impacts on customers. Advocates of advertising argue that these commercials bring us much more values which are crucial in our ever-increasing society. Personally, I am of mixed opinion on that.
First of all, it is undeniable that advertisement can inform people about different products and services. There is an extensive diversity of goods in the market nowadays. Without stunt, customers find it pretty tough to make the right selections of, for example, grocery or garments to satisfy their basic needs. Thus, advertisement makes better purchases which results in the improvement of sales. Furthermore, there is a good possibility that some advertisements of non-commercial have positive effects on society. To be more specific, a wide range of vaccine ads or types of ads against HIV infection are now playing an important role in raising public awareness of grave diseases as well as the urgency to halt their spread.
By contrast, to some extent, advertising activities promote social evils which may lead audiences astray. Specifically, some ads have bad influences on children. For example, it is said that kids are in the habit of aping what they saw on television such as sex, drunk and violence. On top of this, commercials tend to offend viewers when they come right at the mid of the program. When you are watching a movie,a 15-minute advertisement jumping in the middle will surely annoy you.
In conclusion, just as a coin has two sides, commercials have both positives and negative impacts on our life.. Nonetheless, their benefits outweigh their drawbacks for two mentioned main causes, thus ads should not be banned. However, it is suggested that governments should have some policies to overcome limitations of ads.


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