Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effect on children. Do you agree or disagree.

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Using a computer everyday can have more negative than positive effect on children. Do you agree or disagree.
Today is an age of technology. Over the years, huge advancement in technology has given us many gadgets. Computer is one of the greatest gifts of technology that the modern world has received. Computers are used in almost every field of life e.g. research, hospitals, offices, schools etc.
Computers have lots of advantages. Using computers the manual work can be greatly reduced e.g. some difficult calculations which may take days to do manually can be done in a matter of minutes. Computers are also used to maintain records as they can store large amounts of data.
Computers have reached homes and schools too. As a result, children are exposed to the use of computers at quite a young age. Nowadays, you see children as young 4 -5 years old being proficient in the use of computers. A section of society feels that early exposure helps in better brain development. Children are able to hone their skills better. Playing computer games help in better motor nerve activity which helps in developing better co-ordination between the brain and the body.
But, as it true with every technology, the advantages are always over-shadowed by the disadvantages. Regular computer use by the children hinders their physical growth as they are discouraged to indulge in physical activities like sports. This can lead to children suffering from various diseases like obesity and diabetes. Sitting all day long in front of the computer screen also weakens the eye muscles forcing little kids to wear spectacles. Children may become overtly shy and withdrawn as they may lack the social skills required to communicate with other people and make friends. Un-monitored internet usage may expose them to contents which may not be suitable for their age and cause a moral dilemma.
In my opinion, computer usage can be converted from a disadvantage to an advantage by maintaining a balance between the computer usage time and outdoor activities through proper parental guidance.


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