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Writing task 2 about students Who graduated high school should travel or work before starting college another arguments is that they should start college immediately discuss and give opinion
For students graduating from high school is the stepping stone to another interesting part of life. Some people argue that student should take time for excursions or indulge into employment before entering into a college life due to the fact that this brings heterogeneity, mature experience and intensity in further activities. While others state that they should instantly start college study to maintain their continue interest in study. In this essay, I will contend both views and provide extra arguments to support former view of activities before college education.
There is no doubt that travel or work would provide diversity, more experience and intensifies success rates. Firstly, students need heterogeneity in life to get refreshed for further challenges. The world has witnessed that those teenagers get more success who have market experience and world knowledge that is more difficult to attain by just study. For example, Mr. Herschel Kung, a famous Chinese astronomer of 19th century, was visiting to most of the places of world funded by his part tie work. After graduating from college, he knew his goal and devoting his former experience e to achieve his target and got famous. Consequently, this is a succession of life to get to know yourself before entering to unknown world of education. Secondly, students get more experience and knowledge about their best interest to expand their career. For example, during schooling, children just read and make their aim based upon their imaginary world dreams. However, when they come into a real world, this it is most probably that they could get loss in the best career options. Hence, other than just to go with others intentions, a student learn about himself and his successful career choice. Thirdly, this is undeniable to admit that travel or work experience intensifies t his mind to think and do more maturely. Ultimately, it helps him to complete successful college years than just to be immature in tasks.
However, according to conservative people direct study from school to college would help the students to provide better choice of life and maintain their interest. To begin with, during schooling, students usually make their mind in what career options they want to progress. However, if they indulge into travel or employment options, then there is a possibility that they change their mind for further study and always look for ways to go out for fun and enjoyment. However, if they directly enter to college life then they can maintain their study status until they graduate and get their concerned professions. Moreover, this attitude helps them to maintain continue interest towards their goal and study obligations rather to waste precious time in travelling and working during their early age.
To recapitulate, travel and employment are in itself and important experience that students should have before directly indulged in mature unknown environment. Although to maintain continue interest in study, college at earliest could be a good choice, not the best. hence, in my opinion, there should be a moment of refreshment, knowledge and intensity of mind before entering any unknown world.
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Sentence: Hence, other than just to go with others intentions, a student learn about himself and his successful career choice.
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Suggestion: Refer to others and intentions
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Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to others and intentions
Description: The fragment student learn about is rare
Suggestion: Possible agreement error: Replace learn with verb, past participle
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