Essay topic:
Some governments say how many children a family can have in their country. They may control the number of children someone has through taxes. It is sometimes necessary and right for a government to control the population in this way. Do you agree or disagree?
Controlling the growth of a population and limiting its extensive expansion, has recently become one of the important topics that emerged on the surface during the past couple of decades. Though the majority might be already in agreement of the importance of refraining people from having numerous children; they still don't agree on the correct and the most suitable approach to adopt in this regard. Some people thinks that the only way to achieve it, a government ought to inflict a bunch of restrictions and limitations on the parents. Opponents,perceive that there are many other possible ways!
Those who are in favor of resorting to obligation and compulsion, are persuaded that, this would yield quick and efficient results on the short term. Populous areas, are mainly concentrated in the unfortunate nations, that are still under development, where uneducation, poverty and unemployment pervade. According to them, it would be quite difficult to come to convince this kind of people, to stop having children and to content with one or two at maximum, unless they are obliged to incur additional taxes for example.
On the other side, opponents of the idea of referring to the compulsory methods, perceive that a plenty of other persuasive methods could rather be adopted. Governments can prepare a series of sessions to be conducted in the areas deemed as highly suffering from uncontrolled population rise. These sessions could be conducted by a group of pediatrics and professionals, who can shed light on the dangers that surround a mother who attempts to give birth after a certain age for example.
Moreover, governments can prepare a set of TV shows that can be broadcast-ed frequently to arouse the people awareness of limiting the number of children to one or two at most. Professionals can emphasize on the importance of reducing the number of children from an economical and financial perspective. As the number of children is reduced, the family will be increase its capabilities in rising a child in a better shape with good health and well educated.
From my own point of view, I would consider any of the persuasive approaches while addressing this issue, rather than forcing people to do something that they are not convinced with. For me, it is a matter of persuasion rather than a compulsory.
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Sentence: Some people thinks that the only way to achieve it, a government ought to inflict a bunch of restrictions and limitations on the parents.
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Sentence: As the number of children is reduced, the family will be increase its capabilities in rising a child in a better shape with good health and well educated.
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