The best way to reduce the number of traffic accidents is to raise the age limit for the younger drivers and to lower age limit for the aged ones. Do you agree?

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The best way to reduce the number of traffic accidents is to raise the age limit for the younger drivers and to lower age limit for the aged ones. Do you agree?

The reason behind the significant leap in the number of traffic accidents all over the world, has recently become one of the major debatable subjects. There is a strong belief that the age factor of the vehichles' drivers, is greatly related to the appearance of this phenomenon. On the other side of the picture, there is another contradictory valid concern, claiming that this obvious rise in the number of accidents, is due to many other factors, and has probably nothing to do with the age of the driver.

The opponents of the opinion relating the age to the number of accidents, think that other reasons alike the poor quality of infrastructure, shall be considered. According to them, the innappropriatness of the streets and the high ways to serve the increasing number of vehichles circulating on daily basis, is one of the primary causes of the increasing traffic danger. They mainly base this view, on the factual information that the accidents rate is higher in the unfortunate countries. Moreover, they also see the disrespect of the basic rules controlling the traffic circulation, has a pivotal role in this matter.

On the other side, proponents of this opinion, think that increasing the minimum age of a person who intends to issue a driving license, would certainly have a tangible positive impact on this phenomenon, as it would ensure an increased level of drivers maturity in general.

Additionally, lowering the drivers age limit would definitely ensure the improvement of the drivers skills and capabilities. Innarguably, this would lessen the number of mistakes a driver could commit, and yield a better capability to avert accidents, and work around the others mistakes.

In a nutshell, I would perceive that definitely, the age factor has an effect on the increasing number of accidents, all over the world. Nevertheless, there are also a lot of other factors that cannot be discarded or discounted. Therefore, governments should address the issue by tackling the different factors altogether, and not just focus on one factor and neglect the other. Unless governments consider this approach, I would expect the issue to be exacerbating and to be more pervasive, instead of being controlled and confined.

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Sentence: There is a strong belief that the age factor of the vehichles' drivers, is greatly related to the appearance of this phenomenon.
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Sentence: According to them, the innappropriatness of the streets and the high ways to serve the increasing number of vehichles circulating on daily basis, is one of the primary causes of the increasing traffic danger.
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Error: innappropriatness Suggestion: inappropriateness

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