Essay topic:
The graphs below show the number of men and women in full and part-time employment in Australia between 1973 and 1993.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The line charts compare the proportion of Australian males and females in different age group engaging in part-time and full-time jobs in 1973 and 1993. Overall, part-time jobs were more popular among the young than the other, and almost all the figures went up after a 20-year period.
Regarding full-time people, the rates for males were generally ahead of their female counterparts. More specifically, approximately 60% of men between the age of 15 and 19 worked as full-time employees in 1973, and the figure then increased dramatically before hovering around 90% as they grew older. However, only 20% of the oldest age group continued to work. It is also interesting to note that the percentages for full-time males declined slightly in 1993 although the same pattern was repeated. In addition, for full-time women, the dominant age groups were 20-24 and 40-45, at 55% and 45% respectively in 1993.
To turn to part-time work, more females took part in this kind of job than males did. A striking difference was that while the highest figure was for men age 15-19, that for women was the 35-39 age group, about 22% for the former and practically 33% for the latter in 1993. Besides, the numbers for both categories experienced a period of sharp growth after two decades.
Sentence: The line charts
Sentence: The line charts compare the proportion of Australian males and females in diffenrent age group engaging in part-time and full-time jobs in 1973 and 1993.
Error: diffenrent Suggestion: different
Error: diffenrent Suggestion: different
Sentence: It is also intersting to note that the percentages for full-time males declined slightly in 1993 although the same pattern was repeated.
Error: intersting Suggestion: interesting
Error: intersting Suggestion: interesting
Sentence: In addition, for full-time women, the dominant age groups were 20-24 and 40-45, at 55 and 45 repectively in 1993.
Error: repectively Suggestion: respectively
Error: repectively Suggestion: respectively
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Average Word Length: 4.781 4.6
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Score: 8.0 out of 9
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No. of Words: 215 200
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No. of Different Words: 131 100
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Average Word Length: 4.781 4.6
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No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 50 50
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