Some people believe that national sport teams and individual men and women who represent their country should be financially supported by the government. Others think they should be funded by non-government ways (such as business, scholarship). What is your opinion?

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Some people believe that national sport teams and individual men and women who represent their country should be financially supported by the government. Others think they should be funded by non-government ways (such as business, scholarship). What is your opinion?

As a result of constant mass media attention, athletes have become the center topic of the general in recent years. This leads to the phenomenon of heated debates on the issue of who should support them financially. Some people are of the opinion that government has the responsibilities, while others are opposed to this argument, insisting on the donation from non-government organizations. Personally, I agree with the latter.

Admittedly, as part of the national affairs, sports and sports professionals are the responsibilities of the government. To be specific, government has the duties, apart from protecting national security and boosting domestic economy, to advocate the development of sports. Moreover, so much money is required in order to promote sports nationwide that only the government has the ability to achieve this goal. For instance, to cultivate world-class athletes, basic infrastructures and facilities need to be constructed along with qualified and skilled trainers needed to be hired. This involves a great amount of both money and time. Therefore, without the aid of government, it would be unlikely for sports men and women to be fostered.

However, reaching the conclusion that government plays a vital role dose necessarily indicate that government is the only one in supporting sports professionals. Instead, non-government organizations such as private owned enterprises and sports institutions are also essential. In fact, this would be a win-win situation if private businesses support athletes. That is to say, whenever a company donates money to those athletes representing their own county, the athletes earn money obviously, and this company receives public attention that acts as advertisement and increases its company image and reputation as a patriotic enterprise. This in turn will boom the business and profit of this company.

In addition, sports should not be considered as the top concern of the government. Although it is part of the government’s duty, it could never overweigh the importance of solving poverty as well as well as fighting crime. That having been said, the government should always put these two issues in priority. Thus, spending taxpayers’ money on sports would be recognized as a huge waste of domestic resources and personnel.

In conclusion, as far as I am concerned, money from private sectors should be used to boost sports, whereas government has more important issue to tackle.

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Sentence: Although it is part of the government's duty, it could never overweigh the importance of solving poverty as well as well as fighting crime.
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