It is often said that the subjects taught in schools are too academic in orientation and that it would be more useful for children to learn about practical matters such as home management, work and interpersonal skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often said that the subjects taught in schools are too academic in orientation and that it would be more useful for children to learn about practical matters such as home management, work and interpersonal skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The primary purpose of educational institutions is to produce well-versed employees capable of completing their work with efficacy. In this regard, urging schools to focus on the practical aspects of the work at hand is a laudable initiative. Nevertheless, I believe that a theoretical approach to learning as paramount as practical work experience to an individual’s career.

On one hand, while some occupations, such as waitressing and barber, necessitate little academic background, other fields of work such as law or medicine require a profound knowledge of the subject area. In the former situation, the know-how can easily be transmitted from the manager to the trainee. However, in the case of law and medicine, one individual is unlikely to retain such a vast amount of facts which can only be embedded in books, explaining the years of academic studies which the student must spent before being permitted to practice. In the course of their career, modifications in law or health practices are likely to be common occurrences, requiring further learning. As such, an academic learning is a must for certain professions.

Academic teaching, furthermore, favors the student by adopting a systemic approach which can be replicated across all situations. Practical experience often negatively biases certain students, for instance, a hairdressing trainee may only be tasked with a particular type of haircut since this is the only one demanded by the customers. Through academic teaching, school ensures that the student face all types of situation and document their material in such a way that students can easily review them at their own convenience.

On another level, it is generally agreed that a gap exists between theory and practice. Hence, fledgling lawyers and doctors must complete a certain amount of practical work before gaining their license to work. This is critical as universities often adopt a textbook orientation, thus, fail to expose students to ubiquitous workplace problems involving communication with managers, team members, customers or time and stress management.

To conclude, schools should put in their utmost effort to replicate the workplace as far as possible for the benefits of their students. Their curriculum should entail both academic and practical aspects with the proportion of the two varying in accordance to the work field in question.

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Sentence: However, in the case of law and medicine, one individual is unlikely to retain such a vast amount of facts which can only be embedded in books, explaining the years of academic studies which the student must spent before being permitted to practice.
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