Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Why do you think some people are attracted to dangerous sports or other dangerous activities? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

We can see that many people risk their precious lives by being attracted to precarious sports and activities. So the question arises, why do people put their life at risk in order to take part in such life-threatening activities? In my opinion, feeling rush of adrenaline, escaping from same old life and impressing other people are the main reasons of the attraction towards these activities.

First of all, most people normally live in calm, relaxing atmosphere with regular routine, whereas to some people this type of living appears to be same old boring reality. Therefore, in order to seek for ‘new’ type of life with full of excitement, adventure thriving people love doing bungee jumping, speed racing, extreme kayaking and endless list of dangerous sports. To certain extent, I agree that these life-threating activities can be refreshing and stress relieving as I once tried bungee jumping and felt completely free from all the problems that were surrounding me.

In addition to finding more exciting lifestyle, dangerous sports and activities can be seen as a method to simply have fun and enjoy the rush of adrenaline. For instance, the running of the bulls is the most widely known and recognized sport in worldwide, especially in Spain; it is a sport that requires people running away from bulls that have been let loose. Although it is considered highly dangerous as many are injured and even killed in some extreme cases, a number of people still enjoy participating in this activity to get pumped up and feel both nervousness and excitement. In TVs and shows featuring the running of the bulls, one can easily see the excitement and happiness in their eyes.

On top of these reasons, I believe that a large number of people, especially men, tend to take participation in this type of hazardous activities n order to appear strong, vigorous and brave. I have seen my male friends race competitively in speed racing in order to beat each other. Speed racing is, without a doubt, a highly precarious sport that requires an extensive knowledge of driving and without the proper equipment and care, one can easily lose their lives in swift of moment. But, there is nothing stronger than the feeling of competiveness.

We can conclude that each individual has their own reason and preference for taking part in dangerous activities such as feeling excited, getting away from reality and feeling competitive. In a society full of negativity, it is only right that we get to experience refreshing but dangerous activities- only if it is taken seriously with right mind and proper care.

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How do movies or television influence people's behavior? use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

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#7 How do movies or television influence people's behavior? use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

Movies or television have given big influences to the lives of most of us. We spend a lot of hours every week watching movies on DVD or television programs without noticing it, so of course it will affect our behavior. Unfortunately, according to some surveys, it is often said that the effect of movies or television is usually negative. A certain survey shows that television makes people more violent, more inactive, and less imaginative as follows.

Firstly, many televison programs or movies are violent because it is one of the easiest ways to catch a lot of viewer's attention. The more we see violence on television, the less sensitive we become to it. Eventually violence itself may not seem wrong. This is especially true because violence on the screen does not seem to have consequences. Actors can be killed and come back for other television programs or movies. Sometimes we confuse that with reality and we forget that killing someone is permanent.

Secondly, watching television or movies makes us less active. The act of watching television or movies requires almost no activity on the part of the watcher. We just turn it on and change the channels. In addition, all the time that we spend in front of the television is time that we are not spending moving around, playing a sport, or taking a walk. Being inactive can make us feel even more unmotivated to exercise. A survey clarifys that lack of exercise does indeed have numerous adverse effects on the human body. It can lead to cancer, diabetes, obesity, heart diseases, stroke, cognitive decline or dementia, low immunity level, osteoporosis, a fatty liver disease known as hepatic steatosis, risk of injuries and can also affect the transfer of oxygen through blood.

Finally, when we watch television or movies, we do not exercise our imagination. All the stories are told for us. We do not even have to imagine what a character or a place looks like because everything is shown to us. When we have television, we do not have to invent a way to spend a few free moments. We just turn on the television and watch without exercising our imagination. According to a survey, lack of immagination due to watching television can lead to lack of consideration to others, which often results in criminal acts.

Television is a big influence in modern life and it can be a valuable educational tool. The other side of television, however, is that it has a strong negative effect on our behavior, encouraging us to accept violence and to be inactive and unimaginative.

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It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

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#4 It has been said, "Not everything that is learned is contained in books." Compare and contrast knowledge gained from experience with knowledge gained from books. In your opinion, which source is more important? Why?

There are two main channels for people to learn knowledge: from books and from experience. Generally, while knowledge gained from books is theoretical, that gained from experience is practical. It is difficult to answer which is more important to people. It depends on the phases and events of our learning. Knowledge learned from books is instructive, which perhaps cannot be learnt directly from experience. We often hear thunder and see lightning in the sky, and we can easily find out that lightning will be seen sooner than sound will be heard.

According to our experience alone, we cannot tell why this happens. But when we learn some physics in textbooks, we will find the answer that while light travels faster than sound does, it takes less time for light to travel the same distance as sound. Therefore, book knowledge can inform us some useful theories that can give us general ideas and help us understand the real phenomenon better.

In turn, practical knowledge can check out the theories gained from books. There is an old Chinese saying that practice is the only criterion of inspecting the truth. So not all knowledge from books is credible. Rather, it can be even false. When Aristotle wrote in his transcripts that the earth is the center of our solar system, no one doubted it for centuries. However, when Galileo read about it, he did not suspect it at first, but when he made some observations and research, he found it was not the truth. Then he came to the new theory called heliocentrism, which is the theory that the Sun is at the center of the Solar System.

In our daily lives, we can learn much information from practice. To learn swimming, it is useless to be absorbed in reading skills written in books. Only when you learn it in a swimming pool, you can make it. There are still a lot of things you must learn from your own experience, such as driving a car, riding a bicycle, operating a machine. And the most important is that it is often easier learn knowledge from practice than from books. As far as average people are concerned, it is natural to learn from experience. Primitive people learned skills one to one which is the way they were handed down from one generation to another.

Modern people also learn things in practice. In workshops, leading workers teach apprentices carefully; in activity clubs, teachers teach youngsters to be familiar with their hobbies. It is obvious that all things considered knowledge gained from practice is more close and direct than that from books. Therefore, the two kinds of knowledge has importance. For researchers, knowledge from books is more important, while for average people, knowledge from practice is more important. As students, we must first learn knowledge from books well, and at the same time we must have the good sense to tell what is right from what is wrong.

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